Relieve Me- Do YOU like my song?

[pinkjumpingbean135]

This is a song I wrote last night. What do you think of it?

Relieve

Verse 1

I step into the rain,
water splashes my face
washes away my tears
and eliminates my deepest fears
cools the tenseness once inside
lets go of feelings i used to hide.

Chorus

Relieve me
baby you complete me
relieve me
from my grieving inside
relieve me
from every single lie
whoa, please just tell me why

Verse 2

I wipe off all the raindrops
that once dignified me
wipe off all my tears
and suddenly i'm alright,
yeah somehow i'm just find
cools the tenseness once inside
lets go of feelings I used to hide.

Chorus

Bridge:

Relieve me
baby you relieve me
ooh you complete me
you wipe away my biggest fears
wash aways my endless tears
and make me feel alright
for the first time in a while

Chorus

Relieve me
Baby you relieve me
Whoa oh, boy you complete me
baby you relieve me
whoah, please relieve me
please believe me
ooh, just relieve me
and just tell me why

Thanks guys (: Sorry it's sloppy i gotta eat dinner Haha, i'll fix it later (:

awe. nobody likes it

Awe. Well we may as well close this. Unles someone posts.

[WebkinzFireFawn]

It's OK

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[pinkjumpingbean135]

Thanks for posting (:

[tarsky781]

Not really what I'd imagine as "fitting" in my taste of music, but I've got to give you credit, it's well- written.

[katiekinzz]

I voted Its OK but you got guts girl to post it online where everyone can see it. Congrats. I say that you should give it another shot.

[Jennifer36]

Thank you for sharing - keep writing!

[pinkjumpingbean135]

Thank you three for posting.