 11-03-2009, 06:03 PM | #1 |
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Hey Everyone, I wrote some poetry and I would like you to critique it and let me know if you think I should change anything. By the way, the subjects are a little weird.
"Scars Of Life"
She hides her life story under the shirts
She pulls the sleeve up, unaware
Continuing to talk to her friend, until she sees the horror
Realization, now aware, she runs aways as fast as she can, not caring
These are the scars of life.
Take it or leave it (Should I include this line or not?)
"Lifes CD"
The world seems to pause for a minute.
But you can't stop the future, putting anything on hold.
You can't change your mistakes from the past, or rewind through things you don't like
Only pressing play, plunging head over heels into the future
"Lifes Twisted Mystery" (Based On A Rubik's Cube)
Lifes little mystery, some can figure out, others cannot
Twisting, turning, rotating
It all comes down to important paths and specific decisions
Make mistakes and bad choices and become left with parody, an unchangeable mistake
Let me know what ya think! (: |
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