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Old 02-10-2011, 08:48 PM   #1
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Hi! I was just writing yesturday, because I was bored. This is what I wrote:


What is winter? Yes, winter is the freezing below zero tempatures and the sharp wind stinging at your face. But winter is also the afternoon sun shining on the snow, making it sparkle. And the bright snow on tree limbs, making the trees glitter. Winter is the unique swirls and patterens on frosted windows, and the moon and stars shimmering above the silent, cold night.


I think it's pretty good, but I can't think of an ending sentence. It seems like there shoudl be somethign else there, btu I can't think of anything. It's been bugging me all day, could you please give me suggestions for an ending sentence?

BTW, if this is in the wrong part of the forum, feel free to flag this to move it to teh correct place.

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Winter is also where we play in the snow with our pets and have snow ball fight with friends. Yes, this is Winter.

Lovely paragraph!
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Old 02-10-2011, 09:04 PM   #3
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Winter is also where we play in the snow with our pets and have snow ball fight with friends. Yes, this is Winter.

Lovely paragraph!
Ooh, I love that! Thanks so much!
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Old 02-11-2011, 10:39 PM   #4
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I think it's awesome. The thing about a paragraph like that, though, is it's the best opportunity to pack as many powerful adjectives and verbs and figurative language as possible without overdoing it. And repetition is great if you know how to use it right, too.

Winter is the golden moments we spend gliding on the frosted, icy sidewalks. Winter is the vanilla snow, powdered and packed into precious piles, perfect for a precise leap.
Et cetera.

But so far, what you have is great.
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Old 02-16-2011, 12:52 PM   #5
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How about "Winter is a snowflake's dance,"

Nice paragraph! Hope this helped a bit, or inspired you to write something.
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Old 02-16-2011, 06:12 PM   #6
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View Post Originally Posted by tarsky781
I think it's awesome. The thing about a paragraph like that, though, is it's the best opportunity to pack as many powerful adjectives and verbs and figurative language as possible without overdoing it. And repetition is great if you know how to use it right, too.

Winter is the golden moments we spend gliding on the frosted, icy sidewalks. Winter is the vanilla snow, powdered and packed into precious piles, perfect for a precise leap.
Et cetera.

But so far, what you have is great.
"Winter is the vanilla snow, powedered and packed in precious piles, perfect for the precise leap" Lot's of P words in there.
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Old 02-16-2011, 09:38 PM   #7
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"Winter is the vanilla snow, powedered and packed in precious piles, perfect for the precise leap" Lot's of P words in there.
Alliteration. xD
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Old 02-17-2011, 06:40 PM   #8
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Alliteration. xD
I know. I just couldnt spell it xD
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